it was just yesterday, wasn't it
It was just yesterday, wasn’t it Soil. You grow your fantasies in the creased coats of rocks. You paint the vanilla truth screen in fx-colour. And you bury your mistakes deep in earth’s...
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Hi Helm, Very interesting. It's a good one, very good, with something not quite right in the flow to my ear. I have two nits, but they aren't small. My first hunch is to shift the poem over into the...
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Hi Helm, Nice one. I like it. There are a couple of places you begin a sentence with "And," which, IMO, you could omit without harming the poem.
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Thanks Rus, and trust me, I've gone through these considerations already. It began in the third person and drifted in this direction. Soil as a sentence is abrupt, but I think, necessary. At least for...
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Hello Peter, good to see you're back. Know you had a good time in Brazil. Driving the Canadian route through Canada gave me a greater appreciation of your province. Really enjoyed that part of the...
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Re: It was just yesterday, wasn’t it Soil: now there is a word! I think it can stand alone for a minute or two:-) The whole poem tries to define it. I like the way you show us humans as unique...
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